Pretty good.
I wouldn't suggest redong your whole move again because people suggest different things. However I suggest a touch up on the art work, fraame by frame. There are a few spots in the move where it jacks up. Also I suggest having voices as opposed to reading what they are saying. Alot of flash movies are now gearing twords voices and it seems to keep the mob happy. Great work though, I don't know why your score is so low.